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Sunday, 7 February 2010
final reflection
"Using your experiences on this project and relating your programmes to other webisodes you have researched, discuss how taking account of the online audience affects the process of showing creative work"
for our show project, we were asked to make and distribute a micro-series online. unlike micro-series on television and radio, online distribution has a lot of advantages. for example, as soon as you publish work online, anybody with access to the internet can view your work, instantly giving you an audience for free. before the days of the internet, everyday people couldn't have published their work because it wouldn't have been able to have been distributed and nobody would have taken it seriously. well, times have changed. these days anybody can publish their work. if it's a photo they've taken, you can upload it to flickr or upload it to social networking sites such as myspace and facebook. if it's a video you can upload it to public broadcasting websites such as youtube and vimeo, these were the two sites i used to publish my webseries. anybody can publish their work, and these days, anybody can have access to their work. that's why the internet is such a good way of publishing work. before the internet their were limitations when it came to screening and publishing work. because of the internet, the word limitation doesn't exist anymore.
after me and my group were given the project we decided early on that facebook should be the centre site for all the other sites to work round. our fan site if you like. we came to this decision simply because facebook is where everyone is these days. the target audience for the series were people between the ages of 16-21. everybody i know has facebook. when somebody has a little spare time, facebook is the site they will log on to because that's where their friends are. communication over the internet is almost controlled by facebook. when i get home and check my emails, most of them will be from facebook telling me i have messages on facebook. seems bizarre to me sometimes that i even check my emails anymore. another good thing about facebook, pesides the fact that there are a lot of users, is that you can post videos on the page and people can leave comments. the comments that our fans left us helped motivate us into making the episodes better and trying out new techniques and ideas. the audience affected our work considerably. if all we got was negative feedback all the time, our episodes would have been a lot different. because of the support our fans gave us, we were able to take on board any criticism and work with the audience.
one webseries we looked at was called 'the guild'. the guild also had a facebook fanpage, with similar information on. the guild has been going for a lot longer and has elstablished promotional finance from microsoft due to the guild now being available on the xbox 360. why then did the guild not just stick with a website of their choice. they could have paid for a completely customized webpage but instead they chose to advertise on facebook as well. the reason being, that everyone uses it. it's a good, free way of advertising work and getting audience response as well. not everybody will click onto a webpage and leave a message because some people just don't think they'll be heard. everybody leaves messages on facebook, whether you know the person well enough or not. we got some very unlikely people commenting on our fanpage.
because it was a class project, we had restrictions and certain things we couldn't include. after we finished our first episode we were told we couldn't have swearing for example. in fact, we had to cut out all offensive material in the episode. before the episode was aired online, we censored the swearing. we got feedback instantly saying people thought the censoring was bad and that we missed some which was comical. for the next episodes we just didn't include swearing. we used non-offensive language that the audience responded well to. this restriction worked in our favour in the end but the good thing about the internet is that there arent any restrictions. you can publish and upload anything you want because it's in your right. it removed the boundries also compared to say if our series was shown on the television. we wouldn't have been able to miss deadlines by a fraction or include offensive material. that's a good thing about the internet.
not only did the audience affect our show in terms of removing swearing, it also helped me write it. early on i wrote up the character profiles on the facebook page and we posted the scripts on the blog that we have. we got postly positive feedback but due to what people said about the episodes since their release. i was able to take that on board and then the third episode was easier to write. the only thing that i wasn't able to include was valories character. people said that they wanted to see valories character more. the reason why she isn't in the third one was because she couldn't shoot. we managed it with out her and it still worked and got good responses from people who viewed it.
for our show project, we were asked to make and distribute a micro-series online. unlike micro-series on television and radio, online distribution has a lot of advantages. for example, as soon as you publish work online, anybody with access to the internet can view your work, instantly giving you an audience for free. before the days of the internet, everyday people couldn't have published their work because it wouldn't have been able to have been distributed and nobody would have taken it seriously. well, times have changed. these days anybody can publish their work. if it's a photo they've taken, you can upload it to flickr or upload it to social networking sites such as myspace and facebook. if it's a video you can upload it to public broadcasting websites such as youtube and vimeo, these were the two sites i used to publish my webseries. anybody can publish their work, and these days, anybody can have access to their work. that's why the internet is such a good way of publishing work. before the internet their were limitations when it came to screening and publishing work. because of the internet, the word limitation doesn't exist anymore.
after me and my group were given the project we decided early on that facebook should be the centre site for all the other sites to work round. our fan site if you like. we came to this decision simply because facebook is where everyone is these days. the target audience for the series were people between the ages of 16-21. everybody i know has facebook. when somebody has a little spare time, facebook is the site they will log on to because that's where their friends are. communication over the internet is almost controlled by facebook. when i get home and check my emails, most of them will be from facebook telling me i have messages on facebook. seems bizarre to me sometimes that i even check my emails anymore. another good thing about facebook, pesides the fact that there are a lot of users, is that you can post videos on the page and people can leave comments. the comments that our fans left us helped motivate us into making the episodes better and trying out new techniques and ideas. the audience affected our work considerably. if all we got was negative feedback all the time, our episodes would have been a lot different. because of the support our fans gave us, we were able to take on board any criticism and work with the audience.
one webseries we looked at was called 'the guild'. the guild also had a facebook fanpage, with similar information on. the guild has been going for a lot longer and has elstablished promotional finance from microsoft due to the guild now being available on the xbox 360. why then did the guild not just stick with a website of their choice. they could have paid for a completely customized webpage but instead they chose to advertise on facebook as well. the reason being, that everyone uses it. it's a good, free way of advertising work and getting audience response as well. not everybody will click onto a webpage and leave a message because some people just don't think they'll be heard. everybody leaves messages on facebook, whether you know the person well enough or not. we got some very unlikely people commenting on our fanpage.
because it was a class project, we had restrictions and certain things we couldn't include. after we finished our first episode we were told we couldn't have swearing for example. in fact, we had to cut out all offensive material in the episode. before the episode was aired online, we censored the swearing. we got feedback instantly saying people thought the censoring was bad and that we missed some which was comical. for the next episodes we just didn't include swearing. we used non-offensive language that the audience responded well to. this restriction worked in our favour in the end but the good thing about the internet is that there arent any restrictions. you can publish and upload anything you want because it's in your right. it removed the boundries also compared to say if our series was shown on the television. we wouldn't have been able to miss deadlines by a fraction or include offensive material. that's a good thing about the internet.
not only did the audience affect our show in terms of removing swearing, it also helped me write it. early on i wrote up the character profiles on the facebook page and we posted the scripts on the blog that we have. we got postly positive feedback but due to what people said about the episodes since their release. i was able to take that on board and then the third episode was easier to write. the only thing that i wasn't able to include was valories character. people said that they wanted to see valories character more. the reason why she isn't in the third one was because she couldn't shoot. we managed it with out her and it still worked and got good responses from people who viewed it.
the fan page, whats changed
earlier on in the week i mentioned that the fan page had hits from the UK and Chile. i looked at the fan page earlier and it has spread to ther countries as well.
here is the information taken from the insights link on the facebook page. it shows that their have been views from poland and the united states. considering i blogged the other day that it had only been viewed in the UK and Chile, this is great. it shows that word of mouth is spreading and more people are getting interested. the top cities are in the UK but thats natural because it's a product of the UK.
it shows then that it's getting popular after it's release. this happened to the office as well. the first time 'the office' was on telelvision nobody watched it. it was only when it finished that people got interested. they then showed it on television again. it would seem that our webseries is following the same path. it's great though that detention deficit is finally getting noticed.
Thursday, 4 February 2010
producers answers to what he thought of the series
are you happy with the 3 episodes of the webseries we made for you?
I am happy with the improved quality through the 3 series but i am very dissapointed by the lack of keeping to deadlines. this would have caused a number of serious issues were this a commercial brief. the episodes were too long as well. the third episode was the right length.
after interviewing members of the audeince, they said that they liked the second episodes length which was 4.30. they said that episode 3 was too short. what are your thoughts on that?
i'm glad that the audience responded well to the length but i still believe that it could have been shorter. on television there's a specific slot for a series. if the slot was 30minutes, the episode couldn't have been any longer. i suppose online it's different because you don't have the specific time gaps.
do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
i think the concept is very strong and i have been very excited by the idea from the beginning. i feel the first episode did not do justice to the concept but the last episode has a much stronger appeal.
what didn't you like about the series?
the bad language and needless aggression in the first episode. i liked the fact that you changed the offensive language into more inventive expressions of rage for the other episodes.
what did you like about the series?
The title sequence is very good, both in terms of genre conventions and technical ability. the whip cutting was very effective. i enjoyed the more surreal elements of the third episode as well.
what did you think of the characters, and the acting?
i thought matt hornby's performance and character consistently amusing. the other acting improved over time.
we missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you werent happy with either, but what could we have done better?
communicated better and looked out for each other more to ensure everything was completed to time and to a high enough standard.
if we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
continue in the slightly surreal, mighty-boosh like direction you have begun to take.
I am happy with the improved quality through the 3 series but i am very dissapointed by the lack of keeping to deadlines. this would have caused a number of serious issues were this a commercial brief. the episodes were too long as well. the third episode was the right length.
after interviewing members of the audeince, they said that they liked the second episodes length which was 4.30. they said that episode 3 was too short. what are your thoughts on that?
i'm glad that the audience responded well to the length but i still believe that it could have been shorter. on television there's a specific slot for a series. if the slot was 30minutes, the episode couldn't have been any longer. i suppose online it's different because you don't have the specific time gaps.
do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
i think the concept is very strong and i have been very excited by the idea from the beginning. i feel the first episode did not do justice to the concept but the last episode has a much stronger appeal.
what didn't you like about the series?
the bad language and needless aggression in the first episode. i liked the fact that you changed the offensive language into more inventive expressions of rage for the other episodes.
what did you like about the series?
The title sequence is very good, both in terms of genre conventions and technical ability. the whip cutting was very effective. i enjoyed the more surreal elements of the third episode as well.
what did you think of the characters, and the acting?
i thought matt hornby's performance and character consistently amusing. the other acting improved over time.
we missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you werent happy with either, but what could we have done better?
communicated better and looked out for each other more to ensure everything was completed to time and to a high enough standard.
if we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
continue in the slightly surreal, mighty-boosh like direction you have begun to take.
countries that detention deficit has been seen in
most of the fans of the series are from the united kingdom but we have fans in chile as well. i looked on facebook to see if i could find out which countries have been included in the 'insights' page. i thinks its interesting that it isnt just people in the uk who have watched it. it means that people are talking about it and word is spreading across the globe. well, you have to start somewhere. in the future it might have spread to other countries.
questions for the executive producers
are you happy with the 3 episodes of the webseries we made for you?
do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
what didn't you like about the series?
what did you like about the series?
what did you think of the characters, and the acting?
we missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you werent happy with either, but what could we have done better?
if we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
what didn't you like about the series?
what did you like about the series?
what did you think of the characters, and the acting?
we missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you werent happy with either, but what could we have done better?
if we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
interview of focus group - written up.
INTERVIEWER: What are you initial thoughts and feelings of the micro-series?
It was comedy, and it was one of those things that you could watch again because its not bad bad, but its kind of bad good. Like, it knows it's bad, but it makes it good. Like with the editing and stuff.
They developed, the characters, as it went on. I thought the second episode was better than the first, and the 3rd one. There was a lot more comedy and action to it.
I think the girl should have been in it more because she was just there and she didn't really do anything.
I think the first one focused more on the development of the characters. Just introducing them separately. Then the second one had a story base, and then the third one is just kind of random. It was just trippy and 'getting high' for no apparant reason until the end.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
Josh's character (Chris) It might have been the shot type, but it just felt like he had been pasted in there.
INTERVIEWER: The idea was that the characters in each episode didn't really notice he was there because he was kind of in the back of the room.
I really liked Keith's character. But I didn't really like the girls character, but thats because she didn't really do much. But my favourite character is keith, and I liked Sonny, and Pier. They're probably joint second.
You had a good range of characters, and they weren't the same or anything which was good.
And they were really different which was good.
INTERVIEWER: Do you prefer the first, second or third episode and why?
The second one, because it didn't have all the hassle of the first one and the third one was just a bit confusing.
INTERVIEWER: Do you think it worked though?
I think the effect was to confuse the audience which worked, but it was just a bit weird and random. In terms of story-line.
INTERVIEWER: So did you prefer the second one?
I did prefer the second one but I got what was happening in the third one.
I prefered the second one. I though the first episode was too long and the thrid one was too short.
INTERVIEWER: Was the episode structure for the second and third episodes better than the first?
It flowed better than the first one.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the fan page on Facebook?
I havent seen a lot of it so far but from what I've seen i think it's good. I like the idea of posting things from the characters perspectives.
Yes, it gives you more of an insight into the characters.
I like the fan page, it's quite simple, but effective. It does keep it interesting, like you said about the characters posting things. It keeps the background story going for the web-series.
INTERVIEWER: The target audience was people our age. 16-21. Do you think Facebook is a good place for a fan page?
Yeah, definitely.
INTERVIEWER: Do you all have facebook?
(All four) Yes
INTERVIEWER: What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
Development of the second episode.I think you should cut out the swearing because it's just like a beep a minute. I know it was just in the first one but it was just like beep after beep after beep.
I'd quite like the same setting as the second one, but with a different story-line and different characters.Maybe have one or two main characters, and then rotate the other characters around. So you get to see the old characters, like the audience favourites, but then you get to see their new reactions with the new characters.
INTERVIEWER: What are the good and bad points of the episodes? Let's start with the first one...
It was too long, and too much swearing. The good points were that it managed to establish a good base for the episodes to start on, and it wasn't too tiresome that you couldn't watch it again.I think the first one introduced the characters well. There was too much swearing though, it was just beep, beep, beep.
I think you focus the humour too much on Keith going crazy at the beginning. Apart from the Frijj bit which was really funny. Good word play, but I found that there were the two funny bits, you need to stretch the comedy out. I found myself waiting the whole episode for the Frijj joke. There should be more.
INTERVIEWER: What about the second one?
I really liked the second one. It was funny and it had a good story.
I liked it too, and throughout all three of the episodes, the characters managed to stay the same which was good. Sometimes in television series the characters change. They're nice one time and then they're really horrible the next but your characters didn't change.
The only bad point was when you looked at the camera and when the teacher was at the door. But every time I see that it makes me laugh anyway.
INTERVIEWER: What about the third one then?
It was too short, I got the idea you were trying to create an element of confusion but it kind of gave it away a bit with the title so maybe something a little bit more criptic could have worked better.
I didn't like the teachers acting. She was smiling too much about the fact that theres been a gas leak.
INTERVIEWER: Who is your favourite character?
I'd have to say Sonny, your character. it just made me laugh the way he kept hitting people. It was just one of those things I, personally, found hilarious.
Little things please little minds...[Laughs]
I just really liked your reactions.I liked Keith.I liked the one who kept trying to escape, Pier.
INTERVIEWER: Did you think the acting was good?
I think the acting was good for all the characters.
INTERVIEWER: What did you think of vince as a character?
It felt as if he was just stuck on there to fill screen time because he kind of just sat there and said something every now and then.I think he's one of those characters that doesn't really do or say much but hes a part of it. And makes the whole thing whole.
INTERVIEWER: What makes the micro-series watchable?
Humour, slapstick humour. Nonsense really. Silly stuff.The comedic stuff. The way it was random, but good random.
It was just really funny.
It was comedy, and it was one of those things that you could watch again because its not bad bad, but its kind of bad good. Like, it knows it's bad, but it makes it good. Like with the editing and stuff.
They developed, the characters, as it went on. I thought the second episode was better than the first, and the 3rd one. There was a lot more comedy and action to it.
I think the girl should have been in it more because she was just there and she didn't really do anything.
I think the first one focused more on the development of the characters. Just introducing them separately. Then the second one had a story base, and then the third one is just kind of random. It was just trippy and 'getting high' for no apparant reason until the end.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
Josh's character (Chris) It might have been the shot type, but it just felt like he had been pasted in there.
INTERVIEWER: The idea was that the characters in each episode didn't really notice he was there because he was kind of in the back of the room.
I really liked Keith's character. But I didn't really like the girls character, but thats because she didn't really do much. But my favourite character is keith, and I liked Sonny, and Pier. They're probably joint second.
You had a good range of characters, and they weren't the same or anything which was good.
And they were really different which was good.
INTERVIEWER: Do you prefer the first, second or third episode and why?
The second one, because it didn't have all the hassle of the first one and the third one was just a bit confusing.
INTERVIEWER: Do you think it worked though?
I think the effect was to confuse the audience which worked, but it was just a bit weird and random. In terms of story-line.
INTERVIEWER: So did you prefer the second one?
I did prefer the second one but I got what was happening in the third one.
I prefered the second one. I though the first episode was too long and the thrid one was too short.
INTERVIEWER: Was the episode structure for the second and third episodes better than the first?
It flowed better than the first one.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the fan page on Facebook?
I havent seen a lot of it so far but from what I've seen i think it's good. I like the idea of posting things from the characters perspectives.
Yes, it gives you more of an insight into the characters.
I like the fan page, it's quite simple, but effective. It does keep it interesting, like you said about the characters posting things. It keeps the background story going for the web-series.
INTERVIEWER: The target audience was people our age. 16-21. Do you think Facebook is a good place for a fan page?
Yeah, definitely.
INTERVIEWER: Do you all have facebook?
(All four) Yes
INTERVIEWER: What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
Development of the second episode.I think you should cut out the swearing because it's just like a beep a minute. I know it was just in the first one but it was just like beep after beep after beep.
I'd quite like the same setting as the second one, but with a different story-line and different characters.Maybe have one or two main characters, and then rotate the other characters around. So you get to see the old characters, like the audience favourites, but then you get to see their new reactions with the new characters.
INTERVIEWER: What are the good and bad points of the episodes? Let's start with the first one...
It was too long, and too much swearing. The good points were that it managed to establish a good base for the episodes to start on, and it wasn't too tiresome that you couldn't watch it again.I think the first one introduced the characters well. There was too much swearing though, it was just beep, beep, beep.
I think you focus the humour too much on Keith going crazy at the beginning. Apart from the Frijj bit which was really funny. Good word play, but I found that there were the two funny bits, you need to stretch the comedy out. I found myself waiting the whole episode for the Frijj joke. There should be more.
INTERVIEWER: What about the second one?
I really liked the second one. It was funny and it had a good story.
I liked it too, and throughout all three of the episodes, the characters managed to stay the same which was good. Sometimes in television series the characters change. They're nice one time and then they're really horrible the next but your characters didn't change.
The only bad point was when you looked at the camera and when the teacher was at the door. But every time I see that it makes me laugh anyway.
INTERVIEWER: What about the third one then?
It was too short, I got the idea you were trying to create an element of confusion but it kind of gave it away a bit with the title so maybe something a little bit more criptic could have worked better.
I didn't like the teachers acting. She was smiling too much about the fact that theres been a gas leak.
INTERVIEWER: Who is your favourite character?
I'd have to say Sonny, your character. it just made me laugh the way he kept hitting people. It was just one of those things I, personally, found hilarious.
Little things please little minds...[Laughs]
I just really liked your reactions.I liked Keith.I liked the one who kept trying to escape, Pier.
INTERVIEWER: Did you think the acting was good?
I think the acting was good for all the characters.
INTERVIEWER: What did you think of vince as a character?
It felt as if he was just stuck on there to fill screen time because he kind of just sat there and said something every now and then.I think he's one of those characters that doesn't really do or say much but hes a part of it. And makes the whole thing whole.
INTERVIEWER: What makes the micro-series watchable?
Humour, slapstick humour. Nonsense really. Silly stuff.The comedic stuff. The way it was random, but good random.
It was just really funny.
questions for focus group
what are your initial thoughts and feelings on the webseries?
what do you think of the characters and their interactions?
do you prefer the 1st, 2nd or 3rd episode? and why is that?
was changing the episode structure for the 2nd and 3rd episodes a good idea? was it better than the 1st episode?
do you think the episode lengths are suitable for a webseries?
what do you think of the fan page? is facebook a suitable place for the fan page?
what do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
what are the good and bad points of each episode?
who is your favourite character?
what makes this webseries watchable?
what do you think of the characters and their interactions?
do you prefer the 1st, 2nd or 3rd episode? and why is that?
was changing the episode structure for the 2nd and 3rd episodes a good idea? was it better than the 1st episode?
do you think the episode lengths are suitable for a webseries?
what do you think of the fan page? is facebook a suitable place for the fan page?
what do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
what are the good and bad points of each episode?
who is your favourite character?
what makes this webseries watchable?
focus group
today we are going to interview some people and find out what they thought of the webseries, 'detention deficit'. i'm going to show them the fan page and show them each episode. then i've arranged a series of questions to ask them to get some non-bias feedback.
Wednesday, 3 February 2010
script for episode 2 - trapped
detention deficit
episode 2 ‘trapped’
starts off with everyone sitting down at their desks, sonny starts talking to keith
sonny: keith. we’ve been sitting here for 15 minutes now. why haven’t you annoyed me yet?
keith: (looks frustrated with sonny) I'm pacing myself
sonny: so, you’re going to annoy me in a little while instead
keith: no. you ignoranus
sonny: (laughs)
vince and valerie start talking over sonny laughing
vince: what did you call him?
valerie: ignoranus, what the hell have you been smoking in your crack pipe.
sonny: crack (continues laughing)
pier: guys, i’ve nailed it. i have nailed it (bangs book on desk)
keith: sorry, but am i going completely mad? (raises voice)
valerie: going?
sonny: you’ve been a patient at the fucking luni-bin for a while mate
keith: can i just explain how im pacing my. fucking self
sonny: well, it happens
pier: what
sonny: he’s annoying me again
keith: fuck you guys
pause for a while
vince: enlighten me keith
keith: i’ve left my redbull outside the door. so i’m only allowed some every 30 minutes. it should help me sleep. hence, why i’m pacing myself.
everyone stares at him
vince: you didn’t enlighten me
chris: really. (everyone stares) how’s it working out for you. that’s a good idea. good little system. pacing yourself. i do the same for when i play guitar. i don’t want to overwork myself, you know.
everyone continues staring, silence
sonny: who. the. fuck. are you? (shocked face)
chris: i’m chris, pleased to meet you
valerie: why are you in detention then, did you kiss the teachers arse too much
pier: you do seem the type that would stay out, if i’m honest
chris: i chewed gum in class.
vince: i’ve seen things you wouldn’t believe
pause
sonny: wrong moment vince
vince: sorry
pier: (speaking to chris) is that all
chris: yeh, nothing really bad. why you in detention then?
pier: if i told you, i’d have to kill you
fade out
keith and chris are sitting together
keith: thanks for thinking my idea was good by the way. these guys don’t appreciate me.
chris: that’s alright. actually. it’s half past now. you want me to go get your red bull from outside?
keith: (excited voice, slightly nagging) oh yes please. that’d be great. (laughs) if i didn’t have that. i’d probably los the plot. have an axiety attack or something.
chris: that’s okay, i’ll go get it
chris goes to open door, but it doesn’t open
chris: uh, guys. the door isn’t opening
keith: what! (loud, going out of control)
keith starts having an axiety attack, shaking his shoulders. sonny walks up to him and punches him in the face. he falls onto his chair.
sonny: i am not going through that shit again
valerie: the less of that the better
sonny: don’t talk to me
valerie: screw you sonny
chris: what the hell is wrong with you?
sonny: trust me, you’ll thank me later
vince: he is a crazy, moonstruck hound junkie. he needs to be controlled
pier: (talks to chris) did you say the doors locked?
chris: why else would hound junkie have gone fucking mental
sonny: you’re learning
pier: so, i’m trapped here? (looks worried)
chris: yes. we all are
sonny: that’s alright, pier will think of a plan
pier: (awkward laugh) yeh. sure. i’ll think of something
valerie: what. is your mind blank?
vince: what about your amazing idea earlier
pier: i’ll think of another one. that plan isn’t well suited for this type of escape
sonny: type of escape...(interrupts)
pier: stay the fuck out of this sonny. i’ll think of a plan. just give me a minute to gather my thoughts.
fade out.
fades in - 20 minutes later
chris: it’s been ages. a teacher hasn’t even come and checked up on us.
sonny: they don’t. teachers. they’re quite happy to just leave us here to rot. we’re trash to them. we’re the ones who fuck the system. and when your in here, your trash too.
chris: i’m not trash, i’m a good student.
valerie: no your not. you’re a fucking criminal.
vince: i don’t see what’s so special about rugby balls anyway. wilson this and wilson that. basket balls are better. i could have a good conversation with a basket ball
everyone looks over at vince
chris: what are you talking about?
vince: when we’ve been driven to madness. i wanna know who my best friend will be
chris: and you chose a basket ball?
vince: yeh
sonny: suppose they got a nice tan. just don’t impregnate it, might have loadsa golf balls rolling about.
vince: you don’t understand. you’re not ready for the truth
chris: i need to get out of here, any plan yet?
pier: i can’t think. i’m lost. i’m lost.( hangs his head in shame, crying)
sonny: every single fucking day, you think of a plan to escape. every. single, fucking day. are you telling me that the one day we need to a plan, you can’t think of one?
pier: i’m sorry (wails) i’m lost
sonny: you can do it, think
pier: i can’t
sonny: yes you can. ( stands up and grabs piers head) use your head!
rams piers head into the door
valerie: great. now what?
chris: we’re trapped
sonny: fuck sake, stand back, i’ll get the door open
sonny kicks the door really hard, nothing happens
chris: we’re screwed.
pier: (wakes back up) uh, what happened
sonny: call a doctor
pier: sonny, i’m fine, just got a fucking bad headache.
chris: not surprised ( murmurs)
sonny: not for you dipshit
valerie/chris: who
sonny: for me. i think i’ve just broken my leg
end credits
episode 2 ‘trapped’
starts off with everyone sitting down at their desks, sonny starts talking to keith
sonny: keith. we’ve been sitting here for 15 minutes now. why haven’t you annoyed me yet?
keith: (looks frustrated with sonny) I'm pacing myself
sonny: so, you’re going to annoy me in a little while instead
keith: no. you ignoranus
sonny: (laughs)
vince and valerie start talking over sonny laughing
vince: what did you call him?
valerie: ignoranus, what the hell have you been smoking in your crack pipe.
sonny: crack (continues laughing)
pier: guys, i’ve nailed it. i have nailed it (bangs book on desk)
keith: sorry, but am i going completely mad? (raises voice)
valerie: going?
sonny: you’ve been a patient at the fucking luni-bin for a while mate
keith: can i just explain how im pacing my. fucking self
sonny: well, it happens
pier: what
sonny: he’s annoying me again
keith: fuck you guys
pause for a while
vince: enlighten me keith
keith: i’ve left my redbull outside the door. so i’m only allowed some every 30 minutes. it should help me sleep. hence, why i’m pacing myself.
everyone stares at him
vince: you didn’t enlighten me
chris: really. (everyone stares) how’s it working out for you. that’s a good idea. good little system. pacing yourself. i do the same for when i play guitar. i don’t want to overwork myself, you know.
everyone continues staring, silence
sonny: who. the. fuck. are you? (shocked face)
chris: i’m chris, pleased to meet you
valerie: why are you in detention then, did you kiss the teachers arse too much
pier: you do seem the type that would stay out, if i’m honest
chris: i chewed gum in class.
vince: i’ve seen things you wouldn’t believe
pause
sonny: wrong moment vince
vince: sorry
pier: (speaking to chris) is that all
chris: yeh, nothing really bad. why you in detention then?
pier: if i told you, i’d have to kill you
fade out
keith and chris are sitting together
keith: thanks for thinking my idea was good by the way. these guys don’t appreciate me.
chris: that’s alright. actually. it’s half past now. you want me to go get your red bull from outside?
keith: (excited voice, slightly nagging) oh yes please. that’d be great. (laughs) if i didn’t have that. i’d probably los the plot. have an axiety attack or something.
chris: that’s okay, i’ll go get it
chris goes to open door, but it doesn’t open
chris: uh, guys. the door isn’t opening
keith: what! (loud, going out of control)
keith starts having an axiety attack, shaking his shoulders. sonny walks up to him and punches him in the face. he falls onto his chair.
sonny: i am not going through that shit again
valerie: the less of that the better
sonny: don’t talk to me
valerie: screw you sonny
chris: what the hell is wrong with you?
sonny: trust me, you’ll thank me later
vince: he is a crazy, moonstruck hound junkie. he needs to be controlled
pier: (talks to chris) did you say the doors locked?
chris: why else would hound junkie have gone fucking mental
sonny: you’re learning
pier: so, i’m trapped here? (looks worried)
chris: yes. we all are
sonny: that’s alright, pier will think of a plan
pier: (awkward laugh) yeh. sure. i’ll think of something
valerie: what. is your mind blank?
vince: what about your amazing idea earlier
pier: i’ll think of another one. that plan isn’t well suited for this type of escape
sonny: type of escape...(interrupts)
pier: stay the fuck out of this sonny. i’ll think of a plan. just give me a minute to gather my thoughts.
fade out.
fades in - 20 minutes later
chris: it’s been ages. a teacher hasn’t even come and checked up on us.
sonny: they don’t. teachers. they’re quite happy to just leave us here to rot. we’re trash to them. we’re the ones who fuck the system. and when your in here, your trash too.
chris: i’m not trash, i’m a good student.
valerie: no your not. you’re a fucking criminal.
vince: i don’t see what’s so special about rugby balls anyway. wilson this and wilson that. basket balls are better. i could have a good conversation with a basket ball
everyone looks over at vince
chris: what are you talking about?
vince: when we’ve been driven to madness. i wanna know who my best friend will be
chris: and you chose a basket ball?
vince: yeh
sonny: suppose they got a nice tan. just don’t impregnate it, might have loadsa golf balls rolling about.
vince: you don’t understand. you’re not ready for the truth
chris: i need to get out of here, any plan yet?
pier: i can’t think. i’m lost. i’m lost.( hangs his head in shame, crying)
sonny: every single fucking day, you think of a plan to escape. every. single, fucking day. are you telling me that the one day we need to a plan, you can’t think of one?
pier: i’m sorry (wails) i’m lost
sonny: you can do it, think
pier: i can’t
sonny: yes you can. ( stands up and grabs piers head) use your head!
rams piers head into the door
valerie: great. now what?
chris: we’re trapped
sonny: fuck sake, stand back, i’ll get the door open
sonny kicks the door really hard, nothing happens
chris: we’re screwed.
pier: (wakes back up) uh, what happened
sonny: call a doctor
pier: sonny, i’m fine, just got a fucking bad headache.
chris: not surprised ( murmurs)
sonny: not for you dipshit
valerie/chris: who
sonny: for me. i think i’ve just broken my leg
end credits
script for episode 1 - pilot
Detention deficit – Pilot episode script
Starts with pier looking bored leaning on his desk. He looks at the clock, the hand keeps on moving slower and slower. Even goes backwards. Sound of the clock out rules everything else. This is pier zoning out on the clock. Sounds comes back and you can hear Keith mumbling. This turns into Keith talking really quickly. Keith is talking to pier.
Keith: (talking really quickly, hard to make out what he’s saying)
Pier: (sighs)
Pier looks at sonny. Sonny understands what’s on Piers mind.
Sonny: he loco
Pier: (laughs)
Keith knows that he was being made fun of but he continues talking
Sonny: (interrupts Keith) you know what. Uh, Keith. (Pause) you need to talk more. I’m starting to forget you’re here.
Keith: (mocking what sonny has just said to him) “you know what”. You’re really, fucking rude. You need some manners. I’m talking about life. The world. Emotions. Feelings. All that shit. Stuff that brings people closer together. And you’re taking that away.
After keith has told sonny how he feels, sonny throws a pencil case at his face.
Sonny: you talk too much. (aggressive tone)
Keith looks really wound up. His eye starts twitching
Pier: you’ve set him off now. They’ll be no stopping him. You’ve unleashed the ultimate evil. Pandora’s Box. Has been opened.
Sonny: what are you saying? (Looks frustrated and slightly nervous) he does it all the fucking time. He drinks more coffee than the teachers.
Pier: I have a plan to escape, unharmed by the beast
Sonny: Keith
Pier: that one yea. Anyway, the plan is. we tie shoelaces together, until it’s long enough to use as a rope. And then we simply climb down out the window. I call it, ‘operation window lace’.
Sonny: wow pier, not too bad. Apart from the fact that we’re on the ground floor already. (Slaps pier round the back of the head) and what’s wrong with just walking through the door.
Just after sonny finished talking, a pencil case hits him in the face, Keith threw it at him
Sonny: crap!
Keith runs around making a mess of the room, running and moving really quickly. He’s gone insane.
Pier: same old shit. Different day
Fades out, then fades in with “15minutes later”
Keith is lying on the floor after a caffeine come down. The room is a dip.
Sonny: (walking over to keith to see how he is) he’s got to get off this, its turning him into a monster.
Sonny picks up a monster can next to Keith
Valerie walks over as well.
Valerie: look at the room, he’s trashed it. He’s a devil.
Valerie picks up a can of red devil from near keith
Sonny: he needs to kick this shit in.
Sonny picks up a big bottle of kick
Sonny: why are you talking to me (frustrated aggressive tone)
Valerie: don’t know. Everyone in this room is a freak anyway.
Pier walks past
Pier: aye aye aye
Sonny: well. Don’t talk to me
Valerie: (looks at camera) who’s that?
Sonny: I said don’t talk to me.
Valerie: who’s sitting under the table?
Vince: (long pause) hey
Vince get’s out from under the table. Gets out awkwardly, rustling tin foil and gear
Valerie: who are you?
Sonny: that’s Vince. Alright Vince? I haven’t seen you around for ages. You been under the table all this time? (sniggers)
Vince: yes (calm voice)
Sonny: bloody hell mate, I was only joking. What the fuck you playing at. Hiding under the table. Toddlers do that. You’re not a toddler.
Vince: I’ve been here, to prevent intrusion of my mind
Valerie: (looks surprised) okay
They all go to sit down
Sonny: (looks at time, only half an hour has passed) what. This is bullshit
Valerie: speaking of bullshit. What’s this I hear about you throwing a fridge at Damien?
Pier: I heard about that too (continues drawing his plans)
Sonny: there’s nothing much more to say. I threw a fridge at Damien. He annoyed me. Thought it was pretty funny.
Flashback scene where you find out it was a frijj milkshake
Valerie: what a load of shit. Why do you make up stuff as ridiculous as that. You’re an idiot sonny. A first degree idiot.
Sonny: shut up. It’s true.
Valerie: yeah, whatever.
Fades out, fades in
Valerie goes to sit next to Vince. Vince is drawing something in his book.
Valerie: hey vince. What you doing.
Vince: just some drawing. It’s a good way to pass time. And let my creativity spill out.
Valerie: (looking at his work) what is it?
Vince: (putting a lot of detail into picture. Looking concentrated) out of all the ones I’ve seen. This. Is my favourite crop circle.
Valerie: oh
Vince: it’s just so textured and the shape is so alien. It’s just amazing
Valerie: yea, amazing (sounds sarcastic)
Shows the page with a simple circle on the paper. Valerie goes to sit near sonny. Sonny is talking to pier
Sonny: you’ve been doing detention for ages now. Do you feel any different? Have you changed?
Valerie: are you rehabilitated?
Sonny: shut up, what does that mean anyway
Pier: rehabilitated? Well now, let me see. You know, I don’t have any idea what that means.
Sonny: it means have you..
Pier: I know what you think it means sonny. To me it’s just a made up word. A politicians word, so young fella’s like…
Sonny: stop quoting stuff pier. Dammit (frustrated)
They all go quiet for a moment
Sonny: could time possibly go any slower
Vince: the more you concentrate on the time, the slower it will go
Sonny: did you have to tell me that. Shit
Pier: aye aye aye. I can’t think of a better plan than window lace
Valerie: im bored. When can I go
Sonny: you can’t go until the teacher has dismissed us.
Vince: sometimes, he forgets.
Pier: no need to worry everyone. I’ve almost got a plan.
Sonny: I’m going to lose my mind in a minute
Vince: it will feel more like 3 minutes because you’re staring at the clock like that.
Valerie: could this get any worse
Keith wakes up with his twitchy eye
Sonny: oh shit
Starts with pier looking bored leaning on his desk. He looks at the clock, the hand keeps on moving slower and slower. Even goes backwards. Sound of the clock out rules everything else. This is pier zoning out on the clock. Sounds comes back and you can hear Keith mumbling. This turns into Keith talking really quickly. Keith is talking to pier.
Keith: (talking really quickly, hard to make out what he’s saying)
Pier: (sighs)
Pier looks at sonny. Sonny understands what’s on Piers mind.
Sonny: he loco
Pier: (laughs)
Keith knows that he was being made fun of but he continues talking
Sonny: (interrupts Keith) you know what. Uh, Keith. (Pause) you need to talk more. I’m starting to forget you’re here.
Keith: (mocking what sonny has just said to him) “you know what”. You’re really, fucking rude. You need some manners. I’m talking about life. The world. Emotions. Feelings. All that shit. Stuff that brings people closer together. And you’re taking that away.
After keith has told sonny how he feels, sonny throws a pencil case at his face.
Sonny: you talk too much. (aggressive tone)
Keith looks really wound up. His eye starts twitching
Pier: you’ve set him off now. They’ll be no stopping him. You’ve unleashed the ultimate evil. Pandora’s Box. Has been opened.
Sonny: what are you saying? (Looks frustrated and slightly nervous) he does it all the fucking time. He drinks more coffee than the teachers.
Pier: I have a plan to escape, unharmed by the beast
Sonny: Keith
Pier: that one yea. Anyway, the plan is. we tie shoelaces together, until it’s long enough to use as a rope. And then we simply climb down out the window. I call it, ‘operation window lace’.
Sonny: wow pier, not too bad. Apart from the fact that we’re on the ground floor already. (Slaps pier round the back of the head) and what’s wrong with just walking through the door.
Just after sonny finished talking, a pencil case hits him in the face, Keith threw it at him
Sonny: crap!
Keith runs around making a mess of the room, running and moving really quickly. He’s gone insane.
Pier: same old shit. Different day
Fades out, then fades in with “15minutes later”
Keith is lying on the floor after a caffeine come down. The room is a dip.
Sonny: (walking over to keith to see how he is) he’s got to get off this, its turning him into a monster.
Sonny picks up a monster can next to Keith
Valerie walks over as well.
Valerie: look at the room, he’s trashed it. He’s a devil.
Valerie picks up a can of red devil from near keith
Sonny: he needs to kick this shit in.
Sonny picks up a big bottle of kick
Sonny: why are you talking to me (frustrated aggressive tone)
Valerie: don’t know. Everyone in this room is a freak anyway.
Pier walks past
Pier: aye aye aye
Sonny: well. Don’t talk to me
Valerie: (looks at camera) who’s that?
Sonny: I said don’t talk to me.
Valerie: who’s sitting under the table?
Vince: (long pause) hey
Vince get’s out from under the table. Gets out awkwardly, rustling tin foil and gear
Valerie: who are you?
Sonny: that’s Vince. Alright Vince? I haven’t seen you around for ages. You been under the table all this time? (sniggers)
Vince: yes (calm voice)
Sonny: bloody hell mate, I was only joking. What the fuck you playing at. Hiding under the table. Toddlers do that. You’re not a toddler.
Vince: I’ve been here, to prevent intrusion of my mind
Valerie: (looks surprised) okay
They all go to sit down
Sonny: (looks at time, only half an hour has passed) what. This is bullshit
Valerie: speaking of bullshit. What’s this I hear about you throwing a fridge at Damien?
Pier: I heard about that too (continues drawing his plans)
Sonny: there’s nothing much more to say. I threw a fridge at Damien. He annoyed me. Thought it was pretty funny.
Flashback scene where you find out it was a frijj milkshake
Valerie: what a load of shit. Why do you make up stuff as ridiculous as that. You’re an idiot sonny. A first degree idiot.
Sonny: shut up. It’s true.
Valerie: yeah, whatever.
Fades out, fades in
Valerie goes to sit next to Vince. Vince is drawing something in his book.
Valerie: hey vince. What you doing.
Vince: just some drawing. It’s a good way to pass time. And let my creativity spill out.
Valerie: (looking at his work) what is it?
Vince: (putting a lot of detail into picture. Looking concentrated) out of all the ones I’ve seen. This. Is my favourite crop circle.
Valerie: oh
Vince: it’s just so textured and the shape is so alien. It’s just amazing
Valerie: yea, amazing (sounds sarcastic)
Shows the page with a simple circle on the paper. Valerie goes to sit near sonny. Sonny is talking to pier
Sonny: you’ve been doing detention for ages now. Do you feel any different? Have you changed?
Valerie: are you rehabilitated?
Sonny: shut up, what does that mean anyway
Pier: rehabilitated? Well now, let me see. You know, I don’t have any idea what that means.
Sonny: it means have you..
Pier: I know what you think it means sonny. To me it’s just a made up word. A politicians word, so young fella’s like…
Sonny: stop quoting stuff pier. Dammit (frustrated)
They all go quiet for a moment
Sonny: could time possibly go any slower
Vince: the more you concentrate on the time, the slower it will go
Sonny: did you have to tell me that. Shit
Pier: aye aye aye. I can’t think of a better plan than window lace
Valerie: im bored. When can I go
Sonny: you can’t go until the teacher has dismissed us.
Vince: sometimes, he forgets.
Pier: no need to worry everyone. I’ve almost got a plan.
Sonny: I’m going to lose my mind in a minute
Vince: it will feel more like 3 minutes because you’re staring at the clock like that.
Valerie: could this get any worse
Keith wakes up with his twitchy eye
Sonny: oh shit
script for episode 3 - gas leak
script for episode 3 - gas leak
pier: why are you always getting at me? your always around me. where is the pen? vince! (pause) your always, like getting at me. i just cant stand it, the one time..
sonny: (interrupts) well think of a desent plan then and i'll stop getting at you.
pier: i just cant think of a plan, like, what the hell. (looks at keith)
sonny: you are such a vegetarian
shot of keith looking really 'out of it'. sonny and pier stare at him unable to figure out whats up with him. vince goes to see if he's okay.
vince: what seems to be the matter keith?
keith: i have eaten a rare amasoneon coffee bean. (sticks head up while talking and then continues looking around the room)
vince: aah, i see where you're going
shot of vince is from keiths perspective. everythings colourful and morphing.
sonny: what are you two talking about?
pier: yea, what are you two talking about?
vince and keith are talking in gibberish and sonny and pier can't make out what their saying.
sonny: am i missing something here?
pier and sonny look confused at eachother and then continue looking at vince and keith. damien walks through the door
damien: alright guys
keith: aah, cheif. (rubs face paint on his face to look like a red indian. the face paint magically appears with no explanation of why its there) get this spirit out of me
the next shot is of damien but he looks like cheif from 'one flew over the kookoos nest'
fade out
the next scene is where everyone is forming a vitual around keith. keith is lying on the table in the middle of the class chanting something. damien transorms into cheif again. pier is sitting on a table with sonny lying on him.
pier: sonny, do you remember the other day, when, when we were locked in the classroom and i tried to get out the door. and you.
sonny: i smashed your head, i smashed your head
pier: you smashed my head
sonny and pier laugh histerically
next scene everyone is dancing round keith like it's an actual ritual. all the characters have changed their appearance slightly. clothes torn and swapping clothes etc.
after a while a teacher walks in the door looking worried
teacher: oh my god, are you alright, i can't believe you're still alive.
everyone stops dancing and everyone looks normal again though their appearance is the same. basically, they look a mess.
teacher: there's been a massive gas leak
everyone collapses due to the gas they've been breathing in.
fade out
pier: why are you always getting at me? your always around me. where is the pen? vince! (pause) your always, like getting at me. i just cant stand it, the one time..
sonny: (interrupts) well think of a desent plan then and i'll stop getting at you.
pier: i just cant think of a plan, like, what the hell. (looks at keith)
sonny: you are such a vegetarian
shot of keith looking really 'out of it'. sonny and pier stare at him unable to figure out whats up with him. vince goes to see if he's okay.
vince: what seems to be the matter keith?
keith: i have eaten a rare amasoneon coffee bean. (sticks head up while talking and then continues looking around the room)
vince: aah, i see where you're going
shot of vince is from keiths perspective. everythings colourful and morphing.
sonny: what are you two talking about?
pier: yea, what are you two talking about?
vince and keith are talking in gibberish and sonny and pier can't make out what their saying.
sonny: am i missing something here?
pier and sonny look confused at eachother and then continue looking at vince and keith. damien walks through the door
damien: alright guys
keith: aah, cheif. (rubs face paint on his face to look like a red indian. the face paint magically appears with no explanation of why its there) get this spirit out of me
the next shot is of damien but he looks like cheif from 'one flew over the kookoos nest'
fade out
the next scene is where everyone is forming a vitual around keith. keith is lying on the table in the middle of the class chanting something. damien transorms into cheif again. pier is sitting on a table with sonny lying on him.
pier: sonny, do you remember the other day, when, when we were locked in the classroom and i tried to get out the door. and you.
sonny: i smashed your head, i smashed your head
pier: you smashed my head
sonny and pier laugh histerically
next scene everyone is dancing round keith like it's an actual ritual. all the characters have changed their appearance slightly. clothes torn and swapping clothes etc.
after a while a teacher walks in the door looking worried
teacher: oh my god, are you alright, i can't believe you're still alive.
everyone stops dancing and everyone looks normal again though their appearance is the same. basically, they look a mess.
teacher: there's been a massive gas leak
everyone collapses due to the gas they've been breathing in.
fade out
target audience
the intended target audience for our webisodes was people aged 16-21. we decided to appeal to people who were of a similar age simply because they would understand the humour. we've lived around the same time as the audience because we're the same age. also, we appealed more to males because i was writing the script and i have a more male humour, funnily enough.
the way we set about marketing it was to advertise and set up the fan base on facebook. the target audinene spend most of their time on the social network site so it seemed a likely candidate for the fan page.
group self-appraisal
i think we worked well as a group because at all times we knew what our roles were and we all listened but like all group work, there were flaws in communication at times and organization was bad at times. we missed deadlines for 2 of the episodes due to the fact that we had lack of time. also one of our shoots was disrupted because of an urgent meeting. the plan was to film on thursday each week and then edit and upload ready to meet the deadline. because of the meeting we missed one of the shoots so that is what held us up. i think we did good considering though. the final episode was previewed on vimeo on the airing date and on the next day we aired the finished episode. the fans didn't mind too much. the people i spoke to said that they thought the episode was coming out on the friday because the previous episodes did.
DETENTION DEFICIT
EPISODE 1: episode late but all model release forms signed before airing
EPISODE 2: deadline met but model release forms not signed
EPISODE 3: episode unfinished and model release forms not signed
EPISODE 1: episode late but all model release forms signed before airing
EPISODE 2: deadline met but model release forms not signed
EPISODE 3: episode unfinished and model release forms not signed
at times there was only one person exporting videos as well which meant that organization wasn't good enough. i'll admit that it's mostly my fault. as director i should have controlled the group better but through the videos you can clearly see that i did my role well. there's more i could have done but i've learnt from the experience and i understand better now how to approach a situation and project like that. the most important thing about working to deadlines is meeting them. i was more interested in pleasing the fans by making sure the videos were of a high standard. there both important but i approached one more than the other.
when the class was in a big group and we were split up into 2 groups, there was friendly rivalry. as a group we decided that we were going to make sure our comedy series was better than theres. they met all the deadlines and everything but in my opinion, it isn't as good as ours because it isn't funny. on their blog they promised the episodes would get funnier and funnier but the truth is maybe they set out to try and do something they couldn't do. i believe our episodes are funny, they could be better but there's only so much you can do when your a student at sixth form. we knew that slapstick and dry humour appeal mostly to the audience we were trying to reach.
i wanted to see if our marketing was working well. i typed detention deficit on google and clicked search. the first link was the facebook page. i was happy about this because our fan page (facebook page) is the most important page. it's the page that everyone goes to first due to most of the fans being on facebook. we had a major problem with views on youtube and vimeo because most people were watching the episodes on facebook. because of this the views weren't adding.
the next link on google was for our vimeo page. although midway through the project we started putting videos on youtube most of the extra footage and first few episodes are on vimeo. there are more views on vimeo as well compared to youtube. these first two links are the most used and are also the most important.
the third page is twitter. this page isn't used as much as facebook, we wanted to concentrate more on the facebook page because we realised it was more successful. people still look on the twitter page though. the first 3 links on google therefore are the most crucial because there the ones that most people look on for new information and updates. it would be better if our blog also came up but i'm happy with the fact that the fan pages come up first. it shows that our marketing wasn't a total loss.
the look of our fan page
you can't change the style and background of facebook but we wanted the layout to look appealing and easy to circulate through. we decided to make it simple. the wall would be where the comments and updates would be put, including links to the videos. we wanted the comments to be in the style of the characters, as if the characters were talking to the audience. this worked really well and got fans interested due to comments they left.
this is the 'info' page on our fan site. we kept the information simple yet intriguing. we wrote an insight into the cast and crew and who was invlolved. we also wrote a short character profile for each character.
the layout of the info page is above. but it's quite hard to read so this is what it says about the character profiles:
Characters:
Keith:
Keith is a troubled caffiene addict who suffers from anxiety attacks. he causes conflict from annoying people with his mood swings and excessive talking. and when he get's angry, boy does he flip out.
Sonny:
Sonny doesn't quite understand the meaning of detention, but enjoys the thrills that go with getting himself in it. He's certainly the most agressive out of the characters. This guy likes to shout.
Pier:
Pier is one of those people who always wanted the excitement of life to be like the films. He also loves freedom, and because of this, draws up ways in which to escape detention. obviously, his ideas are better than simply walking out the front door.
Valerie:
This girl feeds off everyones problems, causes conflict, and sits down and enjoys watching the mess she's created. She enjoys a good old shout as well, so her and Sonny don't tend to get along.
Vince:
The best way to descibe Vince is he's a paranoid pesemistic who believes that people are watching him at times. If he's reading, it's about conspiracy theories. Though he's obviously troubled, he's very calm in his approach.
Keith:
Keith is a troubled caffiene addict who suffers from anxiety attacks. he causes conflict from annoying people with his mood swings and excessive talking. and when he get's angry, boy does he flip out.
Sonny:
Sonny doesn't quite understand the meaning of detention, but enjoys the thrills that go with getting himself in it. He's certainly the most agressive out of the characters. This guy likes to shout.
Pier:
Pier is one of those people who always wanted the excitement of life to be like the films. He also loves freedom, and because of this, draws up ways in which to escape detention. obviously, his ideas are better than simply walking out the front door.
Valerie:
This girl feeds off everyones problems, causes conflict, and sits down and enjoys watching the mess she's created. She enjoys a good old shout as well, so her and Sonny don't tend to get along.
Vince:
The best way to descibe Vince is he's a paranoid pesemistic who believes that people are watching him at times. If he's reading, it's about conspiracy theories. Though he's obviously troubled, he's very calm in his approach.
facebook fan page
we decided early on that the facebook page would be the main page for promoting and broadcasting our webisodes. the reason being that the intended target audience all use facebook. the last time i checked we had 204 fans on our fan page. considering we only added about 50 friends that means that word has spread through friends. that is the best type of publicity. when you hear somebody talking to someone else about the webisode. it obviously did the job because we had about 100 fans last week.
the graph below shows that our fan number has increased since the episodes have come out. that means that the audience response is mostly positive and they're responding well to the series.
Tuesday, 2 February 2010
extra footage: test footage
here is a link to alexanders test footage. we realised after watching him do the test footage that he could have easily fit most of the roles. he chose pier because he liked the character. looking back i don't think anyone else could have played him as well because he needed to be enthusiastic and jumpy when stressed. alex was perfectly cast.
Test footage Alexander from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
extra footage: test footage
here is a link of my test footage. the thing i like about doing this was we were laughing at eachother so i understood what the group found funny. i used that to help write the scripts as well because i wanted to make it funny, but i wanted it to appeal to the group as well.
James Test footage from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
exra footage: test footage
here is a link to matt hornbys test footage. some of the stuff that we say was so witty and dramatic that i used some of it for inspiration in the script.
Matt test footage from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
extras that we made for detention deficit
not only did we make a teaser trailer for each individual episode but we also made, a gag reel for the first episode, a test footage and audition video of each actor in the group, and we made a title sequence from scratch as well with lively effects and witty music to appeal to our target audience.
here ishe links to the test footage of hayden
here ishe links to the test footage of hayden
Hayden test footage from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
what i was part of for the web-series - marketing
i didn't do much in terms of marketing but i did help build up the fan page on facebook. for a while we were all asked to leave a comment in the style of our characters or another character. i still do leave a comment when i go onto it. it makes the characters more believable and it also counts as extras. its another way to open up the series and make it appeal to more people. an example of one of the comments was like below:
Detention Deficit Oi oi, we've pretty much finished making the teaser trailer now. So all you impatient losers can take a sneaky look at what's up. - Sonny January 13 at 11:29am · Comment ·LikeUnlike
we thought that this would be a really clever way to promote the series. by using the actual characters. some of the comments would give you more of an insight into the characters lives as well which gets them away from the detention room scenario that all the episodes have in common. an example would be below:
Detention Deficit today i punched my neighbors cat in the face. - Valorie January 21 at 5:04pm · Comment ·LikeUnlike · View Feedback (1)
Detention Deficit Oi oi, we've pretty much finished making the teaser trailer now. So all you impatient losers can take a sneaky look at what's up. - Sonny January 13 at 11:29am · Comment ·LikeUnlike
we thought that this would be a really clever way to promote the series. by using the actual characters. some of the comments would give you more of an insight into the characters lives as well which gets them away from the detention room scenario that all the episodes have in common. an example would be below:
Detention Deficit today i punched my neighbors cat in the face. - Valorie January 21 at 5:04pm · Comment ·LikeUnlike · View Feedback (1)
what i was part of for the web-series - editing
i didn't have any input into the first episode because i was quite happy with hayden and alex doing it but i decided to edit the second one with laurence, who was initially going to edit anyway. the way it worked was he would put the footage in sequence on final cut, and i'd tell him the sequence. i told laurence what footage went where and how it would be cut. basically, i was directing laurence on how to edit the second episode but we swapped over after a while and i made little changes and added some transitons and held shots etc. we both worked really well together to do this.
on the third episode, i edited the sequence ( what me and laurence did on the second episode) and then gave the laptop to hayden so he could put the effects on the edit. i then exported it after they were on the footage. i didn't have a massive part to play in the editing since i didn't edit the 1st episode but i had a lot to do with the other 2 episodes. i found it really easy editing. i think the reason why is because i had a mental image of the shoot itself and the script. it made it easier editing because i knew what was there.
on the third episode, i edited the sequence ( what me and laurence did on the second episode) and then gave the laptop to hayden so he could put the effects on the edit. i then exported it after they were on the footage. i didn't have a massive part to play in the editing since i didn't edit the 1st episode but i had a lot to do with the other 2 episodes. i found it really easy editing. i think the reason why is because i had a mental image of the shoot itself and the script. it made it easier editing because i knew what was there.
what i was part of for the web-series - acting
i also acting in the series as well. i was a character called sonny. a class bully basically who didn't care much about consiquences. while we were doing auditions for the characters, we realised that we all knew the characters quite well and it would help save time filming because filming at college while people have different timetables can be difficult (we struggled with one person being on a different timetable, aimee). so i decided to be sonny because he was the character i thought would suit me best. plus, the rest of the group had characters that suited them better.
acting in the episodes was easy enough, because i knew the script and was directing them as well, i kind of knew what i had to be doing. it also meant that my interaction scenes with people was easier because i spoke to them first before shooting about how it would work and then we'd just do it. i didn't need to confer with anyone as to how i was going to act.
acting in the episodes was easy enough, because i knew the script and was directing them as well, i kind of knew what i had to be doing. it also meant that my interaction scenes with people was easier because i spoke to them first before shooting about how it would work and then we'd just do it. i didn't need to confer with anyone as to how i was going to act.
what i was part of for the web-series - directing
apart from writing and planning the episodes, i also directed them as well. this was really stressful, especially in the first episode. over time it got easier and people were listening to me a bit more, but the first episode didn't go according to plan.
on the shoot we kept on getting people walking into the classroom and teachers were disrupting our shoot and letting students in. it got really hectic and nobody else in my group was really dismissing them so that is what i did on that particular shoot. i told teachers to bugger off:) though looking back the shoot was a disaster, we got the work done and we managed to get all the shots filmed. i like to think that meant i did my job properly. the group did get annoyed at me but they thanked me for it afterwards because they knew that we wouldn't have got the work done otherwise.
i also directed the trailers that we made for each episode. not a big job but i was just explaining the idea behind each one and then thinking of ways we could film them. everyone else in the group had creative input too mind you.
the second shoot was a lot better, we managed to find a room, after scouting for one for about an hour, and we started to shoot. people were sticking to their roles better and were acting together better. it made my job easier. the sound supervisor wasn't there so laurence had to do sound as well as filming for this particular episode. he did a great job because its not easy doing too important jobs like that. we didn't have any interruptions this time which was good aswell. also, aimee had to leave at 2.00pm on the day of the shoot so i made good use of time management skills by filming all of her stuff first.
the third episode was a toddle to film, because most of it was going to be jazzed up with effects anyway, there wasn't that much i had to direct. we were all really excited about this episode as well so porale was high enough without me trying to pump it up. there were a few shots that we didn't get but we managed to edit without and still make the episode work.
i directed hayden and alex to edit the 1st episode and this didn't go so well. the only things i said to them were to censor all the swearing and not to cut it too much. they managed to deny both of those requests and because of this, our episode got a lot of dismissal. but it was alright, they were just experimenting to see if it worked or not. for the next episodes, that i edited with someone else, we decided to keep the cutting simple and less jumpy.
on the shoot we kept on getting people walking into the classroom and teachers were disrupting our shoot and letting students in. it got really hectic and nobody else in my group was really dismissing them so that is what i did on that particular shoot. i told teachers to bugger off:) though looking back the shoot was a disaster, we got the work done and we managed to get all the shots filmed. i like to think that meant i did my job properly. the group did get annoyed at me but they thanked me for it afterwards because they knew that we wouldn't have got the work done otherwise.
i also directed the trailers that we made for each episode. not a big job but i was just explaining the idea behind each one and then thinking of ways we could film them. everyone else in the group had creative input too mind you.
the second shoot was a lot better, we managed to find a room, after scouting for one for about an hour, and we started to shoot. people were sticking to their roles better and were acting together better. it made my job easier. the sound supervisor wasn't there so laurence had to do sound as well as filming for this particular episode. he did a great job because its not easy doing too important jobs like that. we didn't have any interruptions this time which was good aswell. also, aimee had to leave at 2.00pm on the day of the shoot so i made good use of time management skills by filming all of her stuff first.
the third episode was a toddle to film, because most of it was going to be jazzed up with effects anyway, there wasn't that much i had to direct. we were all really excited about this episode as well so porale was high enough without me trying to pump it up. there were a few shots that we didn't get but we managed to edit without and still make the episode work.
i directed hayden and alex to edit the 1st episode and this didn't go so well. the only things i said to them were to censor all the swearing and not to cut it too much. they managed to deny both of those requests and because of this, our episode got a lot of dismissal. but it was alright, they were just experimenting to see if it worked or not. for the next episodes, that i edited with someone else, we decided to keep the cutting simple and less jumpy.
what i was part of for the web-series
after the class was split into 2 different groups, everyone in each individual group had quite a bit role. initially i was just going to be the script writer but that changed when we got into the smaller group.
script:
my first job was writing the script for the first episode. i took on board the title, which was detention deficit, and the character profiles that the group had decided on and were all happy with and starting writing the script. i wanted the first episode to not follow too much of a narrative, but let the characters speak their mind a bit and through learning about them and watching them interact with eachother, that would hold the pace. i wrote it with swear words because the intended target audience is 16-21 year olds and its about teenagers in detention, people that age in that situation swear a lot. just after we begun the edit we had to censor the swearing though due to the producers, teachers, not liking it and thinking it wasnt working. we werent happy but when i wrote the other 2 episodes i beared that in mind and left the swearing out. i researched other words instead that were non offensive.
i also used references to films in the first episode to reach an active audience that would understand the jokes. little lines from shawshank redemption for example were used.
in the second episode i wanted there to be a storyline involved. i used the famous trapped scenario that is so overused but so overdone. i just used that as a good ending really. i wanted mostly social interaction between characters. there's no swearing in the second episode, i used different words such as 'wazzock' and 'turd'. non offensive words that still have the same effect, to a point.
references in the second episode include lines from bladerunner and toystory 2. the, 'use your head' quote that buzz says to rex beofre they use his head to open a vent. the good thing about this reference is when we got feedback, we realised that people had noticed and thought it was funny.
the third episode was quickly written because we had such short time before the deadline. i quicly wrote a basic script that was kept to quite well though in some of the scenes the inprovisation worked much better because its more neutral and funny. the effects was something i worked round, i knew we were incorporating them some how so i wrote the script with them in mind. it was easy and didn't take long.
overall i think the writing of the scripts got better over time. if i was to be critical of my own work, i'd say my favourite script is the second one because it's a really good narrative and it was fun to write. though the third episode works well and is really bizzare and interesting, i don't think the episode structure works quite as well as the second one. i was happy with the first one and so was the group, but after censoring the swearwords i just got annoyed that i included them. it was okay though because we took on board the reflections and feedback we got and made the episodes better. i think that i wrote the scripts well and the group were happy as well which is the most important thing.
script:
my first job was writing the script for the first episode. i took on board the title, which was detention deficit, and the character profiles that the group had decided on and were all happy with and starting writing the script. i wanted the first episode to not follow too much of a narrative, but let the characters speak their mind a bit and through learning about them and watching them interact with eachother, that would hold the pace. i wrote it with swear words because the intended target audience is 16-21 year olds and its about teenagers in detention, people that age in that situation swear a lot. just after we begun the edit we had to censor the swearing though due to the producers, teachers, not liking it and thinking it wasnt working. we werent happy but when i wrote the other 2 episodes i beared that in mind and left the swearing out. i researched other words instead that were non offensive.
i also used references to films in the first episode to reach an active audience that would understand the jokes. little lines from shawshank redemption for example were used.
in the second episode i wanted there to be a storyline involved. i used the famous trapped scenario that is so overused but so overdone. i just used that as a good ending really. i wanted mostly social interaction between characters. there's no swearing in the second episode, i used different words such as 'wazzock' and 'turd'. non offensive words that still have the same effect, to a point.
references in the second episode include lines from bladerunner and toystory 2. the, 'use your head' quote that buzz says to rex beofre they use his head to open a vent. the good thing about this reference is when we got feedback, we realised that people had noticed and thought it was funny.
the third episode was quickly written because we had such short time before the deadline. i quicly wrote a basic script that was kept to quite well though in some of the scenes the inprovisation worked much better because its more neutral and funny. the effects was something i worked round, i knew we were incorporating them some how so i wrote the script with them in mind. it was easy and didn't take long.
overall i think the writing of the scripts got better over time. if i was to be critical of my own work, i'd say my favourite script is the second one because it's a really good narrative and it was fun to write. though the third episode works well and is really bizzare and interesting, i don't think the episode structure works quite as well as the second one. i was happy with the first one and so was the group, but after censoring the swearwords i just got annoyed that i included them. it was okay though because we took on board the reflections and feedback we got and made the episodes better. i think that i wrote the scripts well and the group were happy as well which is the most important thing.
audience feedback for episode 3 - gas leak
so far the youtube page has 73 views. this isn't much but the actual fan page on facebook has been viewed more times than that so because of the fact that we embedded the videos onto facebook, the link system isnt relevant.
after doing audience response work and holding interviews with a focus group, the third episode is the episode people remember the most. in the focus group they said that episode 2 was their favourite episode but they said that episode 3 was one that stood out the most. mainly because it was so strnage and bizarre. this was positive feedback for me and the group because that's what we wanted to achieve. we wanted regular viewers of the series to realise that the situation in the third episode is completely crazy. but what it did was it put the characters in a unexpected situation, a situation you wouldn't normally see. we gave the audience something different that appealed to them. when i interviewed the producer he said that he liked the way the series was following along side the mighty boosh. both the mighty boosh and detention deficit have the same or similar target audience.
after doing audience response work and holding interviews with a focus group, the third episode is the episode people remember the most. in the focus group they said that episode 2 was their favourite episode but they said that episode 3 was one that stood out the most. mainly because it was so strnage and bizarre. this was positive feedback for me and the group because that's what we wanted to achieve. we wanted regular viewers of the series to realise that the situation in the third episode is completely crazy. but what it did was it put the characters in a unexpected situation, a situation you wouldn't normally see. we gave the audience something different that appealed to them. when i interviewed the producer he said that he liked the way the series was following along side the mighty boosh. both the mighty boosh and detention deficit have the same or similar target audience.
episode 3 - gas leak
in this episode we wanted to go crazy with the plot becausewe weren't sure whether or not we'd get the chance to make another episode. we decided to go with a really abstract plot and put the characters through some insane scenarios. while me hayden and matt were coming up with ideas i suggested that keith should eat a coffee bean and then trip. matt and hayden elaborated on this idea and came up with the gas leak idea. i then took the draft and wrote a quick script. we wanted the effects and acting to speak for themselves really. it is a bit crazy but hopefully its funny.
feedback to teaser trailer
so far on youtube there are 81views on the teaser trailer and one comment left. the comment is talking about the characters. therefore, people are starting to understand them. the comment is below:
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Ashmista (2 days ago) Show Hide - Reply Kieth Kieth Nooooo Kiethe! Has he had too much cofeee again?
this shows that someone is understanding the characters. when i wrote up the character profiles, keiths character and humour came from him drinking too much caffiene. although we didn't get many views, this is really positive because it means that the way we're acting , directing and portraying these characters in the episodes is working and people are understanding them.
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Ashmista (2 days ago) Show Hide - Reply Kieth Kieth Nooooo Kiethe! Has he had too much cofeee again?
this shows that someone is understanding the characters. when i wrote up the character profiles, keiths character and humour came from him drinking too much caffiene. although we didn't get many views, this is really positive because it means that the way we're acting , directing and portraying these characters in the episodes is working and people are understanding them.
teaser trailer for episode 3 - gas leak / second trailer
this trailer was meant to give you more of an insight into the episode itself. the other one we made previously was just a poke at the other group for what they did to us. this trailer shows what to expect really. we used really trippy effects and we clearly showed that it was keith who was halucinating as well. that is a rough description of the final episode.
teaer trailer for episode 3 - gass leak
this is the teaser trailer for episode 3 - gas leak
i think that it works really well, it doesn't give you an insight into the episode coming up but it does mock the other groups episode. it shows that we're having fun with the project and that there's friendly rivalry. the other group did the same to us so we wanted to return the favour. what they did was in their teaser trailer, they had the words, 'detention deficit sucks' on the white board in shot. not so original if you ask me but we decided to mock in a more mature manner. what we did was we got permission to use a bit of there music for their title sequence. we then filmed in a toilet at college and twhen pier opens one of the doors, their title music plays and he pretends it smells really bad and uses the words, 'that isnt even funny'. we all thought it was pretty funny:) we later made a teaser for the episode that reflected the effects we were going to use.
audience feedback - what they thought of episode 3
what did you think of episode 3. we used different effects and storyline, did it work well?
Alternative idea, which was good. Although I thought at first he had drank some coffee? or was that the idea? Funky effects, although what happened at the beginning? it was just black for some seconds in the title sequence. Title sequence was good with the graffitied books. I just liked it.
Liked the ending where the teacher walks in and says 'You nearly died, we had a major gas leak' and then they all fall over. It was good having variety between the episodes. This one was really out there (as vince would say).
Alternative idea, which was good. Although I thought at first he had drank some coffee? or was that the idea? Funky effects, although what happened at the beginning? it was just black for some seconds in the title sequence. Title sequence was good with the graffitied books. I just liked it.
Liked the ending where the teacher walks in and says 'You nearly died, we had a major gas leak' and then they all fall over. It was good having variety between the episodes. This one was really out there (as vince would say).
audience feedback - what they thought of episode 2
what did you think about episode 2
Nice, very nice. Thought the slap was really good. Looked realistic too. Had to ask James if he actually slapped them. Liked the plot and I thought it was suitably chosen for the time available. Nice work on calming the camera an all that. Made it a lot easier to focus on the characters. Some funny shizz. I liked the Toy Story reference and the new geek character. Was interesting to see him thrown in the mix with all the regular rebels.
Good episode. It was actually funny, more so than the first episode.
Nice, very nice. Thought the slap was really good. Looked realistic too. Had to ask James if he actually slapped them. Liked the plot and I thought it was suitably chosen for the time available. Nice work on calming the camera an all that. Made it a lot easier to focus on the characters. Some funny shizz. I liked the Toy Story reference and the new geek character. Was interesting to see him thrown in the mix with all the regular rebels.
Good episode. It was actually funny, more so than the first episode.
audience feedback - what they thought of episode 1
i interviewed one of my friends who hadn't seen any of the 3 episodes of my web-series, 'detention deficit' on what he thought of them as a comedy. after watching the first episode i asked him what he thought about it?
I liked the characters, I thought there were some great personalities, it's a shame the episodes weren't longer so more of a plot could be constructed.
I thought the camera shots could be a bit too jumpy and quick for my liking and quite often it was hard too follow who was talking to who. So maybe if there were shots which were more slow and chilled, maybe with the view over the shoulder thing so we can see who is talking to who. That would be cool.
Also the swearing editing was kinda lame. Sorry but it was. I think either making the beeping out more subtle or just leaving the swearing in and having slightly less of it would be better. I don't think leaving it in would be that bad as beeping it just draws attention to it.
Overall a really good episode, just chill with the camera and the beeping. :)
I liked the characters, I thought there were some great personalities, it's a shame the episodes weren't longer so more of a plot could be constructed.
I thought the camera shots could be a bit too jumpy and quick for my liking and quite often it was hard too follow who was talking to who. So maybe if there were shots which were more slow and chilled, maybe with the view over the shoulder thing so we can see who is talking to who. That would be cool.
Also the swearing editing was kinda lame. Sorry but it was. I think either making the beeping out more subtle or just leaving the swearing in and having slightly less of it would be better. I don't think leaving it in would be that bad as beeping it just draws attention to it.
Overall a really good episode, just chill with the camera and the beeping. :)
class feedback for episode 2 - trapped
in class we watched the second episode and then had a feedback session. some similar views from the 1st episode were expressed but mainly people liked it.
Negative:
Negative:
- Background sound needed at the start x3
- Dull
- Tries too hard to be funny, just makes it worse x2
- Keith totally unbelievable x2
- Not much story-line
- Continuity not good - Different rooms etc. x2
- Acting still poor x2
- Ignored advice for different actors
- Ending dull
- Mindless violence - Not needed x3
- Sound is fuzzy x3
- Episode is still too long
- Character Chris is unexplained x2
- Shot cut mid-sentence
- Hayden's character [Keith] is laughing in a shot - Out of character
- Shots of Hayden don't flow x2
- Hayden's character is 'just annoying'
- Close up of James doesn't work x5
- Nearly all of the shots are mid-shots, needs more variation
- The Trapped title is too short
- Over confident acting
- Last shot doesn't work as well as intended
- Didn't explain scene change
- Foot breaking not believable
- Amy could act better
- Sounds are a bit off at times x2
- Looked at the camera
- Teacher at the end is strange x2
- Spelling of character's names is inconsistent
- Character interactions are good
- Too long considering the 90 second rule x2
- Alexander/James scene too long
- "For who?" line too over reacted
- Foot break SFX was off
- Audio doesn't 'fit in'
- Script not quite tight enough, should be 'laugh every two seconds'
- Just kids being stupid
Positive:
- Title sequence good
- Chris is a good new character x2
- Matt's character [Vince] is awesome
- Improved episode length to last episode
- Better setting to last episode x2
- Alexander's character [Pier] is a lot better this time
- Cuts are good
- Good story-line
- Teacher seen at the door at the end, works well, adds to the comedy
- Better script to last episode x2
- Better camera work and cinematography x3
- No swearing makes it much better
- Fast and slow cuts
- More lines and interaction
- Better than episode one by far
- Acting is great x2
- Abusive terms are witty
- Colours on the wall are good
- Matt's acting is very good
- Editing was good with better fades and transitions
- False punch is goodmost of them were misunderstandings and i believe that some of them weren't intended to be constructive but we took it all on board anyway.
audience response to episode 2 -trapped
the feedback we got from our fans from the second episode was much better. people picked up the references that we made, there was one from toy story, people liked the storyline as well. we didn't get any negative feedback from the fans on the second episode. the only negative feedback i got was over a text. someone said that they thought the last scene when sonny breaks his leg wasn't believable enough. apart from that the feedback we got was all positive. we took on board what they said though and we decided to make the third episode completely different and abstract.
audience response for teaser 2
again, we embedded the trailer on facebook so the view count isn't correct but we have so far got 65 views on vimeo for the trailer. on facebook we also got a comment from someone saying, 'now that is funny'. the positive feedback is good because it shows that people are understanding the series more.
teaser trailer for episode 2 - trapped
Detention Deficit Teaser 2 from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
the second teaser trailer wasn't intended to give much away in terms of plot for the second episode, we wanted to show the characters 'steroetypes' more and show off there characteristics. we decided to include a reference to the great escape which is where the pier character came from. the teaser trailer idea was to show the confrontation between the characters. while pier is throwing a ball at the wall (great escape reference) sonny walks in picks it up and throws it at keith. it's a very good teaser trailer and when we showed people it they really liked it.
class feedback
after watching the episode in class, the class gave feedback on what they thought about the episode 1. there is positive feedback and negative feedback but thats good because it means that we can reflect on whats wrong and we can make changed to appeal to the intended target audience.
Positive:
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots
Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't french enough?
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters
the numbers next to some of them mean that more than one person gave that feedback. after we got the feedback we decided to make some changed. firstly, we decided to make the editing of the next episodes simpler and not quite as jumpy because it was making the comic timing not work. there wasn't really any comic timing in the first episode.
Positive:
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots
Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't french enough?
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters
the numbers next to some of them mean that more than one person gave that feedback. after we got the feedback we decided to make some changed. firstly, we decided to make the editing of the next episodes simpler and not quite as jumpy because it was making the comic timing not work. there wasn't really any comic timing in the first episode.
audience response to episode 1 -pilot / comments
we got quite a lot of feedback on our fan page from episode 1. someone left a comment saying that they really liked it. they actually used the term, 'i love it!!!!'. people also said that they liked it. we didn't just get positive feedback though. people also commented on the fact that the swearing was annoying and that some swear words weren't censored. on the day i also got text messages from people who watched the episode. one of them said that they really liked matt hornbys character and they thought he was really funny.
audience response to episode 1 - pilot
these are the statistics from vimeo for the first episode. because it was embedded on facebook the view counts didn't total properly. it shows that the most amount of views are around when we aired it online and then after that the views slowly start to decrease due to the fact that new episodes came out. though there's no evidnece to suggest that the embed on facebook meant no view counts were added, this does occur when you embed using vimeo.
episode 1 - pilot
Detention Deficit: Episode ONE from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
the first episode for detention deficit didn't work as well as expected. firstly, the shoot was interrupted so we had hardly any time to shoot. we also booked a room to film in but then someone told us we couldn't film in there. i luckily managed to find a room to film in but it didn't meet the criteria that we needed for the script and storyboard. we worked well considering the fallbacks but it wasn't what we expected. the final edit wasn't up to scratch either. the episode was cut too much. we changed the editing technique after episode 1 but that was based on audience response so something good came from it. the episode itself doesn't follow a straight forward storyline but it is a good introduction to the characters.
teaser trailer for episode 1
Detention Deficit Teaser Trailer from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
this teaser trailer was meant to outline the idea behind the series. the teaser trailer is one shot of a door and you can slowly hear the arguing inside the door getting louder and louder until a chair hits the door. its meant to show that the characters in detention have disagreements that end in humour. the idea behind the trailer was my idea. we made it before we casted so it worked quite well with what we had. it has 63 hits so far on vimeo. due to the fact that we embeded the video on our fan page on facebook, most of the views weren't counted.
todays session
due to the fact that the episode that was aired last night wasn't completely finished, i went about editing the final episode and making it ready for airing tonight. we just didn't have enough time to upload the final episode yesturday.
yesturday when i got into college, i wrote the script with matt and hayden, basing it around the plot that we wrote last friday. after we wrote the script together we planned where we would film it and then we got to work. the setting up was abit tiresome because the sunlight was mucking up the white balance on the cameras. joe put a screen over the window and after that it was a lot better. we then started filming. we got a lot of footage because most of it was going to be changed by adding effects. we then got back to long road and we uploaded and edited. we wrote, filmed, uploaded and edited all in a day. we just didn't have enough time to fully upload it to youtube in full quality settings so we just put the episode up without the effects because the upload time was quicker.
today when i got into college i finished editing with hayden, he took off some of the footage and put the effects on. while he was doing the effects i just made the transitions better and the comic timing had to be changed slightly as well. i then added the title sequence and credits at the end. hayden then uploaded it to youtube. though the deadline was yesturday, matt wrote a comment on our facebook page explaining that it would be ready today and that vimeo had an insight which was basically the 3rd episode minus the effects. we hope to get a lot of views tonight.
yesturday when i got into college, i wrote the script with matt and hayden, basing it around the plot that we wrote last friday. after we wrote the script together we planned where we would film it and then we got to work. the setting up was abit tiresome because the sunlight was mucking up the white balance on the cameras. joe put a screen over the window and after that it was a lot better. we then started filming. we got a lot of footage because most of it was going to be changed by adding effects. we then got back to long road and we uploaded and edited. we wrote, filmed, uploaded and edited all in a day. we just didn't have enough time to fully upload it to youtube in full quality settings so we just put the episode up without the effects because the upload time was quicker.
today when i got into college i finished editing with hayden, he took off some of the footage and put the effects on. while he was doing the effects i just made the transitions better and the comic timing had to be changed slightly as well. i then added the title sequence and credits at the end. hayden then uploaded it to youtube. though the deadline was yesturday, matt wrote a comment on our facebook page explaining that it would be ready today and that vimeo had an insight which was basically the 3rd episode minus the effects. we hope to get a lot of views tonight.
Monday, 1 February 2010
evidence from cram creative
this is the letter that was given to the groups from the teachers, who were acting as producers overlooking everything we were doing. this letter is tellijng us that they were interested in showing our work at the junction, live venue, and show them on a professional televiosn web channel. this meant having to take out anything offensive, including lanuage and violence. we also needed to include them in the credits to make it more professional from a glance. 
this was an issue because it was given to my group and me after we'd edited the first episode, which features a fair bit of swearing. we couldn't re-shoot because we didn't have enough time but what we did was we censored the language out. because we had such little time and rendering the episodes took so long, we missed a few of the censoring which actually made it funny. we all thought it was a disaster, i thought the first episode was terrible compared to what i wanted from it. reasons for that were down to time management and the editor going off on a tangent instead of sticking to the storyboard and group discussions on thoughts and feelings. feedback we recieved however was that people agreed with us on the editing but found the censoring hilarious. anything will make people laugh these days won't it.
Sunday, 31 January 2010
fridays session - finishing edit
today me and laurence came in early to finish the second episode. we filmed some missed footage and we also recorded some sound effects such as snapping branches and thuds from stamping on the floor and such. we also uploaded the new credits and put the title sequence on the timeline. it was all finished by 12.20 so it look us an hour to finish the editing for the second episode. after that, i had to go to the junction to film the fiver night. i wanted to leave the group some work to do so alex edited the teaser trailer for episode 3. matt and hayden wrote the script for episode 3 and they also started on the effects and storyboard. they got a lot of productive work done which was good.
thursday - the shoot for episode 2
today was the second attempt to shoot episode 2. the first time we have problems with time because we had to have a class meeting, the problems we had on this shoot were that we couldn't find a room to film in. when ever we found a room and got permission, somebody else walked in and said we couldn't use it. it was a lot of hassle and we spent about an hour looking for a room. when we finally found a room we got to work straight away. the set for this episode was a lot more relaxed. we also got it filmed quicker this time round as well. the first episode took about 2 hours with constant disruption. this episode took about an hour and a half to shoot.
on the shoot i was directing and laurence was in charge of sound and camera. everyone else had creative input but they were acting mostly. laurence did a great job considering he had so much to do. the reason why he was in charge of sound was because philippa didn't turn up. everyone else was infront of the camera so he was the only other person who could do it. he didn't mind. the stunts this time around were more fun as well. theres a scene when i need to punch hayden in the face. we simply just made it look believable and we added a sound effect over it. it turned out really great though. we also wanted this episode to be simpler than the first. so therefore we kept the shots simple and we stuck to the 180 degree rule.
after shooting me and laurence uploaded to final cut and we began editing. it took about 40minutes to edit the footage in sequence. the 1st episode took hayden and alex a lot longer to edit. me and laurence both agreed that we'd come in the next day and do some final touches to make it better.
on the shoot i was directing and laurence was in charge of sound and camera. everyone else had creative input but they were acting mostly. laurence did a great job considering he had so much to do. the reason why he was in charge of sound was because philippa didn't turn up. everyone else was infront of the camera so he was the only other person who could do it. he didn't mind. the stunts this time around were more fun as well. theres a scene when i need to punch hayden in the face. we simply just made it look believable and we added a sound effect over it. it turned out really great though. we also wanted this episode to be simpler than the first. so therefore we kept the shots simple and we stuck to the 180 degree rule.
after shooting me and laurence uploaded to final cut and we began editing. it took about 40minutes to edit the footage in sequence. the 1st episode took hayden and alex a lot longer to edit. me and laurence both agreed that we'd come in the next day and do some final touches to make it better.
Wednesday, 27 January 2010
reflection of the lesson
today we rehearsed and me and matt edited the script slightly to make it shorter. then me matt and hayden concentrated on finding non-offensive words that we can use for episode 2 and 3. we found a list of words that we could use:
gick - shit
turd
apache
twanger
wazzock
flange
shut up you brain donor
nail clipper
oxygen theif
sad act
div
mug
muppet
cretin
pleb
facicious
merc
ladies front bottom
doody face
vegetarian
log
donkey milker
butt breath
flap
knackers
gazungas
rehearsals today
today me and the rest of the cast are doing rehearsals getting ready for the second episode filming tommorrow.
Monday, 25 January 2010
overview of project
so far the project has had ups and downs, the ups being that we all get on well as a group, the downs consisting mostly of bad communication and bad timing for filming due to things coming up. the things that worked well were the title sequence and the credits. the casting was really good and the scripting has been good. equally there are issues with all of that though. some people didnt remember the script well enough, some of the cast can only act on certain days. the swearing in the script was an issue and for the second episode its going to be scrapped. we all thought it would be beneficial.
so far in the project ive had numerous roles. i've been the scriptwriter, the director and an actor. i've also filmed for the teaser trailers, audition and test footage, the title sequence and generally just helping out with the filming of the episode and such. i've also been organising everyone to get the work done. in order to make the next episode better, me and laurence are going to direct together. i believed that i had a lot of stress on me and if i directed the episode and characters, laurence could direct everyone else to ge the work done and watch over the editing. this would help release stress and the set would be calmer i think.
we also think that laurence should edit and then after he's edited the sequence, hayden and alex should return and tweek it, editing sound and adding effects. i think this would be more beneficial and laurence would get more of it done if he worked alone i reckon. the problem with the 1st ep is that it was cut too much. the second episode is going to be shorter as well, but due to the script, its impossible to cut it to 90seconds. we all agreed that 2minutes 30 would be a better time for the episode. it would be quick, funny and there would be enough going on to keep it interesting.
so far in the project ive had numerous roles. i've been the scriptwriter, the director and an actor. i've also filmed for the teaser trailers, audition and test footage, the title sequence and generally just helping out with the filming of the episode and such. i've also been organising everyone to get the work done. in order to make the next episode better, me and laurence are going to direct together. i believed that i had a lot of stress on me and if i directed the episode and characters, laurence could direct everyone else to ge the work done and watch over the editing. this would help release stress and the set would be calmer i think.
we also think that laurence should edit and then after he's edited the sequence, hayden and alex should return and tweek it, editing sound and adding effects. i think this would be more beneficial and laurence would get more of it done if he worked alone i reckon. the problem with the 1st ep is that it was cut too much. the second episode is going to be shorter as well, but due to the script, its impossible to cut it to 90seconds. we all agreed that 2minutes 30 would be a better time for the episode. it would be quick, funny and there would be enough going on to keep it interesting.
Sunday, 24 January 2010
work done over the weekend
today we had a discusion over facebook as to what we all thought after the first episode. we reflected on the good points and bad points. changes we should make to the group and who worked well in their roles.
we all agreed that the title sequence and end credits looked brilliant. i honestly think their better than the actual episode. the music over them works really well as well. we agreed that the next episodes should have little or no swearing in them as well. the censors beeping all the time doesn't work very well and we got audience feedback about the beeping being annoying as well. this will be something we will change due to feedback from the audience.
we also got feedback that the characters are great. someone commented me saying sonny and vince were really funny characters. this is the kind of response we want and need. though i wasnt happy with the overall final episode, i was pleased that we got positive as well as negative feedback. we also got quite a lot of views as well.
we all agreed that the title sequence and end credits looked brilliant. i honestly think their better than the actual episode. the music over them works really well as well. we agreed that the next episodes should have little or no swearing in them as well. the censors beeping all the time doesn't work very well and we got audience feedback about the beeping being annoying as well. this will be something we will change due to feedback from the audience.
we also got feedback that the characters are great. someone commented me saying sonny and vince were really funny characters. this is the kind of response we want and need. though i wasnt happy with the overall final episode, i was pleased that we got positive as well as negative feedback. we also got quite a lot of views as well.
fridays session
today was spent finishing everything. we finished the gag reel ready for airing after the episode. we finished the credits and title sequence which both looked really good. the first episode however needed a lot of work doing to it. there were gaps, the swearing hadnt been censored and it needed cleaning up as well. alex and hayden are brilliant at editing, however i don't think they know how to edit comedy. some of the jokes in the script were ruined by the editing. hopefully the second episode will turn out better. also, the editing was a little too quick for my liking. the cuts shouldn't be so quick because you lose the humour that the actors and script are expressing. it just looks like a short film at the moment. i think that the storyboard should be followed more accuratly next time, and by that i mean, it should be followed next time.
we all worked really hard though today to get it finished. towards the end we were all helping eachother efficiently. we met the deadline of 7.00pm as well.
we all worked really hard though today to get it finished. towards the end we were all helping eachother efficiently. we met the deadline of 7.00pm as well.
shooting episode 2
today we planned to shoot for episode 2 put things didn't go according to plan. i got into college at 10.50, we were shooting at 12.20. i got in early so i could plan for filming by drawing the storyboard and shot list. everyone else started to arrive and at 12 o'clock we went to go pick up the equipment. nick told us that we had to be back at the classroom at 1.05. dispite this we went to shoot in G11 like last week. we set up and began filming, we didn't get much done in the 30minutes we had. we went back to the classroom and realised that we were having a group therapy session. though this session helped sort out problems in the group, it made more problems for my group. we didn't have enough time to go film. instead me and matt went and filmed the last of the title sequence. we got work done today but we didn't get the episode filmed. the deadline for it is on tuesday next week and we arent going to make it.
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